Description: This term we chose a goal to focus on in Writing. I chose Sentences, because my writing doesn't have a mix of long and short sentences.
Big Idea: A complex sentence is a sentence with an independent and a dependent clause. This is an example: Tane is a boy, with brown eyes. To make sure it is a complex sentence, you need to add a comma in the correct place.
Feedback:I liked how you added heaps of complex sentences.
Feedforward: I can't find any feedforward. #Finis
Evaluation: I like that I added quite a few complex sentences. Next time I could add 1 or 2 per paragraph/
Tane, you have used some really good complex sentences in this piece that add effect to your writing. Your next step is to only add necessary detail to your writing as you can quite easily lose your audience if you list places or names (Like the places and zoo's etc)
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