Dice Writing Portfolio Sample

Description: Today I rolled two dices, and each dice means something to do with writing, like dice 2, rolled on 3 is onamateopeia. I got a two, so I did what I do, and I got another two, so I had to use alliteration.

Feedback/Feedforward: I think you could add a bit more to you're sentence but I like the game and how you make a sentence out of the numbers and how that the dice (says) what you have to make a sentence about.

-Tom

Evaluation: I agree with Tom that I could've added a bit more in my story, but I think I have explained it very well.

Writing Post

Description: Today I wrote a sentence with a metaphor and I have it below.

Spelling

Description: Today I played spelling city for a spelling test. I couldn't hear my one wrong word.

Sunny weekend at my cousins house

WALT: be a careful writer

In the weekend, I went to my cousins house. I saw Hally, my cousins uncle dog. I gave my cousin a present when my dad went to Shanghai in china. Then I had to go to Freyberg Pool because my cousin had to go to swimming lessons. then I went home to get my togs on and then I went to the Lido. I learned how to float on my back. First you put your head up to the roof. Second you get ready to push off. Third you push off.

Play station

In the weekend, I played play station. My favourite game is crash. I think I got 1268 coins. 

I've brought a new vehicle and a new suit. After that, I had my chinese lesson. Before I had a BBQ, I played touch. I had a sauauge for lunch and a drink of milk. Then I smashed the whole box.

My dads birthday

18.6.12
On Thursday, it was my dads birthday. We had Kfc for dinner. My nana called Colleen, she gave the cake to us. It tasted like peaches on a hot day. It was the day when I had the sauauge and lemonade. The party was at our house. When I rang up my nana, she wasen't there but there was a man called Graham at my nanas house. When My dad got Kfc, the chips were in the chicken popcorn box. The  date of the birthday was 14.6.12.

The water Cycle

Yesterday we were learning about rain. When it rain, it goes into a river then in the sea. The rain comes down from the clouds when its heavy

13.6.12
Where does water comes from? First it rains and then it goes to the mountains and then it goes to the rirver then it goes out to the sea and the hot sun dry the rain because the sun is hotter then the rain. In an tsunami if your house is fether away from the beach, your house will be okay. If your house is close to the beach, it will get blown down. By Tane

19.6.12
Where does water comes from? First it rains and then it goes to the

mountains and then it goes to the river then it goes out to the sea and the hot sun dry the rain because the sun is hotter then the rain. In an tsunami if your house is feather away from the beach, your house will be okay. If your house is close to the beach, it will get blown down.
20.6.12
Where does water comes from? First its at the ocean. And then the sun drys the water. Then it goes to the mountains. Then it goes to the river. Then it goes out to the sea. and the hot sun dry the rain because the sun is hotter then the rain. In an tsunami if your house is feather away from the beach, it will be okay, but if your house was on the beach, it will get blown down.

 Ebony says: I can see how you have improved and added to your explanation each time Tane, well done? Do you think the sun dries the rain or the heat from the sun turns the water into a vapour?

WALT:write a recount

On Tuesday the hole school with their buddies went to the movies. It was called The Lorax. The funny thing was that Ted kiss the cerial box.

WALT: Write a recount

 In writing we are always trying to be Careful writers and Thoughtful writers.
(For more information see writing page on this blog)

Our specific writing focus for today is...

WALT: include lots of details
SC: include information like...
who, where, when, and what

2.4.12
In the weekend I saw Sophie W at  Lazer Tag. I went to Lazer Tag because It was Jack's Birthday. Sophie's Brother Jack turn 6 years old. I got 780 points. After that we went to Mcdonalds. I got a Happy meal. I got a burger chips and coke. When we finshed, we got some ice-cream. There were 6 people. With my happy meal, I got a Panda book. When the party was finshed, I ate my ice-cream at home. It was yummy! Sophie's Brother Jack is from Russell Street School. When my mum and my sister picked me up, my sister got an ice-cream too. Then my sister did not want an ice-cream because she wanted Mcdonalds too.

 5.4.12
In the weekend I saw Sophie W at  Laser Tag. I went to Laser Tag because It was Jack's Birthday. Sophie's Brother Jack turn 6 years old. I got 780 points. After that we went to McDonalds. I got a Happy meal. I got a burger chips and coke. When we finshed, we got some ice-cream. There were 6 people. With my happy meal, I got a Panda book. When the party was finshed, I ate my ice-cream at home. It was yummy! Sophie's Brother Jack is from Russell Street School. When my mum and my sister picked me up, my sister got an ice-cream too. Then my sister did not want an ice-cream because she wanted McDonalds too.

Ebony says: What a great story Tane. I like how you added lots of details about who was there, what you did and where you did it. I wonder what it was like playing Laser Tag? Does it hurt? I would love to know more about this.